Sadbastards report on McCain affair
Note: This post is for teaching purposes only and does not, in any way, reflect the opinions of the owner of Citizen Journalism 101.
The following was reported on http://www.sadbastards.wordpress.com/ on February 20, 2008
I don’t correct on bias, just writing. My notes are in blue. The grade and re-written article are at the bottom of the post.
The Article:
The New York Times Tries to Save Face After Supporting and Covering Up for the Hillary Clinton Machine. Vicki Iseman is John McCain’s Lover.
The two sentence headline makes it sound like there are two posts since they don’t connect logically
In a effort to retain their crown as the liberal beacon, the old gray lady, The New York Times, found that not only its circulation, advertising, stock price and now editorial authority is irrelevant. Besides the bad grammar, this sentence makes no sense. The sentence starts with in an effort to, which implies that the reader will be told what NYT did. They aren’t. In addition, the crown metaphor is not matched with the beacon metaphor.
The rest of the story doesn’t flow from the original idea; that is, to show that the NYT has been participating in a liberal cover-up while favoring Hilary Clinton. The writer went off on a tirade that failed to get his point across.
Obama is crushing the Hillary Clinton machine and the massive coverup of voter fraud in New York and New Hampshire can’t keep the Clinton machine running. The wheels have fallen off. Not only are leaders in the Democrat party pointing out the voter fraud, the liberal mayor of New York City, Michael Bloomberg called it that. What? This sentence is terrible. Instead, there is a smear job on the front page of the the (has been), New York Times.
Can the Clinton machine pull it off again in Ohio with the help of the unions and the Cleveland Plain Dealer?So, in a last ditch effort, the NYT’s editors drop a bomb on McCain. They even endorsed the moderate war hero a few weeks ago. Take a look at the affair they are reporting that McCain had with Vicki Iseman. Why didn’t they do that kind of reporting on Bill Clinton? First, before he was elected, but more importantly, when he was being serviced by a young intern in the oval office? The Internet has toppled the elite liberal media in 2008. I predict the NYT stock price to fall below $15 in the coming weeks.
Grade D+ – For mixed metaphors, lack of sentence follow-thru, bad grammar and story flow problems.
Re-written article
New York Times Tries to Save Face; Reports Iseman McCain’s Lover
In an effort to retain their crown as Queen of Liberal Journalism, that old gray lady, The New York Times, has dropped a bomb on the John McCain camp by reporting an alleged affair with lobbyist Vicki Iseman. Click here for the full NYT report.
With crushing blows dealt to the Clinton campaign in recent primaries, there seems little chance that the New York Senator will win the nomination. And yet, the New York Times continues to report news that is biased toward an impending victory for the former first lady. Amid rumors of Democratic voter fraud in both New York and New Hampshire that could have been explored in depth on the pages of the newspaper, the editors of the NYT chose instead to distract readers by engaging in mud-slinging against John McCain. While New York’s liberal mayor points to evidence of voter fraud in the Clinton held states, NYT failed to report on it, instead inventing a smear on McCain’s past.
If the NYT is reporting this information out of voter concern, why wasn’t this kind of reporting done prior to Bill Clinton getting elected? Or better still, why didn’t NYT report the affair with Monica Lewinski when it first recieved the information rather than holding it for a more convenient political atmosphere?
No amount of liberal media cover-up will change the fact that the Clinton Machine is running out of fuel and Obama is pulling ahead. While Hilary Clinton may be hoping for a win in Ohio with the help of the Cleveland Plain Dealer and her union backers, it will take more than that to cover up her losses and report that she is winning where she isn’t.
In a society filled with citizen journalists and independent media outlets, corporate media must learn that bias in no longer tolerated. With so many citizen journalists hungry to report the truth, the media can no longer print articles that are meant to sway voters into believing falsehoods. Since this forced change in media has resulted in a lack of reader trust, corporate media outlets likes the NYT will either have to shift to stating fact only or will have to fold their tents and go home. Due to its newfound lack of editorial authority, I predict that the NYT stock prices will fall to under $15 per share in the coming weeks.
Note: Since he was graded, he has changed the report somewhat, therefore the quoted report above is no longer what appears on the original blogsite. It is better but still not an A. New Grade: C
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